by Kristin Ammerman
Bestselling authors such as Brandon Sanderson, Mary Robinette Kowal, Jeff Wheeler, Cassandra Clare, Neil Gaiman, and others write novels as well as short stories. There are several reasons why novelists also write short stories.
- Sense of accomplishment: Writing something shorter that can be accomplished in a month rather than a year (or years) is satisfying.
- Story testing: Trying out new characters or worlds on readers before creating an entire novel can be a wise investment of your time, as well as proof for a publisher that there’s a market for your story.
- Experimentation: Writing a new style or genre can stretch your skills. Forcing yourself outside your comfort zone will often improve your overall writing.
- Attention: If you’re building a platform (or audience), short stories are a great way to get attention from readers. You might also snag the attention of a coveted agent, editor or publisher, who frequently read magazines for new voices. Authors can publish solo, or as part of an anthology or in a respected magazine.
- Marketing: You can use your short story as a freebie to encourage newsletter sign-ups.
- Financial: most anthologies and magazines pay for the stories they publish.
No matter which pursuit lights you up, your short stories need to be riveting. So if you want to improve your short stories, pay attention, because we’ve asked Deep Magic E-zine (one of those awesome resources for getting published, paid, and increasing your exposure) to tell us which common mistakes sink a story and what you can do to make sure your short stories rock.
Kristin Ammerman is on the board of the E-zine and shared the following:
Want the inside scoop on what short story “judges” are thinking? We’ve got their words below so you can identify the priorities when you’re competing on a professional playing field. From that feedback, we’ve also pulled the top three short story mistakes that come across our desks every day at the E-zine (and we see a LOT of stories every day). So before you get started on your story, check out what not to do as well as our tips on how to strengthen your short stories!”
Mistake #1: No Hook (or a False Hook)
A hook means to literally “hook” your reader with the lines of your writing, preferably early in the story. Writers need to juggle several elements early in the story, and one of them includes the hook. You can successfully set this up in a number of ways, but the most popular are to:
- Get the reader wondering (without causing frustration).
- Drop the reader into the action.
- Introduce an interesting character.
- Do something that makes your reader want to keep turning the pages.
I have been impressed with how polished the writing has been, but without a hook, polished is boring.”
Roger Billings, lawyer, avid reader, and Deep Magic E-zine First Reader
(First Readers are preliminary deciders regarding whether a story gets more of our time and attention.)
Tip! Make sure you fulfill the promises you make early in the story. For example, let’s say you hook your reader in the first paragraph by saying, “Susie was faced with a terrible choice: sending her husband or her son to Mars to fight in the alien wars.” By the end of the story, then, Susie needs to have made this decision, or have an incredibly compelling reason why she didn’t. Otherwise, you’re not fulfilling the “promise” you made to your readers with your original hook.
If I’m not hooked, I’m not going to read further. The hook has to be quick, but also sincere—not just a ruse to keep me reading. If the hook-promise goes unfulfilled, I will reject the story.”
Lindsay Flanagan, professional editor and Deep Magic E-zine First Reader
Mistake #2: Tepid Tension
Tension is created by having high stakes in a story. It takes a real craftsman to create tension within the first page (along with all the other elements you’re weaving into the story). If there isn’t any inner conflict (irreconcilable self), environmental risk, or something to lose, then the tension is at risk of being too low.
Failure to create interest in the opening page or two will pull me out of the story and is likely to get a rejection. Avoid too much detail or description without creating tension.”
Brendon Taylor, lawyer, author, and founding member of Deep Magic E-zine
Tip! Spice up your characters. This is an indirect way of creating tension, but if readers have someone worth rooting for, the tension automatically increases.
If the characters have depth and complexity right from the beginning, the tension will be more interesting to me. I don’t need to fully understand the characters, but I need to have a sense of their motivations. Shallow characters put me to sleep right away.”
Kristen Pinto-Coelho, psychology student, fantasy fiction fan, and Deep Magic E-zine First Reader
If I don’t care about the characters or their problems right away, I just won’t read past the second page. I need some sort of tension, mystery, or problem to cling to from the beginning.”
Jeff Wheeler, bestselling author and founding member of Deep Magic E-zine
Mistake #3: Abrupt Ending
Surprisingly enough, this is our number-one complaint. When stories end abruptly, that’s a sign we didn’t get the proper third act of the story; we are missing the descending action and wrap-up.
Just because it’s a short story doesn’t mean an author shouldn’t take the time to properly resolve it.”
Shannon Hall, English literature student and Deep Magic E-zine First Reader
Some stories were very good, but the ending was so abrupt, I thought it was a mistake.”
Sarah Bran, art student and Deep Magic E-zine First Reader
Tip! If you’re getting feedback that your story is ending too abruptly, this is a good problem to have for two reasons: 1) This is a sign that your reader was really into your story; she wanted time to say good-bye to your characters and world. 2) Fixing the last couple of pages is much easier than re-vamping a character, changing the tone, or revising other threads that are woven throughout the whole story. All your reader is wanting is more of your writing at the end!
Knowing where to focus is key to wowing a reader. So now that you’ve got that down, let loose, be creative, and have fun!
Do you have any tips for people writing short stories? Share them below!
Kristin Ammerman is on the board of the Deep Magic E-zine and runs their social media. When she’s not writing, reading middle-grade chapter books, or working as a marketer, you can find her with her three elementary-school-aged boys. You can find out more about Kristin at Deep Magic or on HowDoesShe.com.